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The Surreal

July 3, 2009

Note: This is my first ever 100-word fiction 🙂

The Surreal

vladimir kushThe electricity was available yet the neighbor’s generator had been turned on for hours, making constant grueling sound, driving him insane. He buried his head between the pillows to escape but of no avail. Not just sleeplessness he was battling with a severe headache too.

A thought occurred to him awhile later. He smiled demonically and with his eyes closed his heart churned a sentence or two. He shuddered and broke into sweat. With a blasting sound the machine had been silenced forever. No harm in using a gifted power for a valid reason, he thought, and went to sleep.

25 Comments leave one →
  1. July 3, 2009 8:41 am

    Fiction is always out of my scope, but this one is good, because it only 100 words…

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 3, 2009 5:28 pm

      Yes, just 100 words grilled me because… I am not used to writing stories in 100 words 🙂

  2. July 3, 2009 11:20 am

    it took me three readings to finally understand wht happened …

    still wonder what kind of powers he had … some divik shakti … or an exorcist …

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 3, 2009 5:31 pm

      Next time I should write 300 words story so that you read it once! 😛
      Well let’s assume he had this (gifted) power to put curse on something… 😀

  3. July 3, 2009 6:54 pm

    well expressed thought Ayesha…wil be visiting again and again..

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:29 pm

      Welcome here and thank you for appreciating the effort! 🙂

  4. July 3, 2009 7:34 pm

    hahahahaha…… me enjoyd readin that! 😀

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:29 pm

      I am glad you did 😀

  5. July 4, 2009 3:51 am

    That was very good! Am glad you came back to writing fiction after a long hiatus 🙂

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:30 pm

      Thanks and it was rather difficult to limit the thought to 100 words… 🙂

  6. Alhamdolillah permalink
    July 5, 2009 1:59 am

    Assalamoalaikum, hmm another wonderful story…good work 🙂


    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:30 pm

      Thank you! 🙂

  7. Alhamdolillah permalink
    July 5, 2009 2:11 am

    ohh I read an older comment someone had said” I liked your comment about rehmat shah afridi” I actually know him perosnally, well my dad does but anyway, can I get that article? I would like to read what is there.. ( just out of interest..)

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:31 pm

      I don’t have those articles… I read his statement in some paper where he said he was punished for writing openly which certain people didn’t like hence he was framed.

  8. July 5, 2009 4:33 am

    LOL :-P. Everyone would want these “special” powers if they’re dicturbed in their sleep :-P. Seems like a true story 😀

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:32 pm

      Yes, but then it is feared people might misuse those powers 😛

      Well the generator making torturous sound is real 😀

  9. July 5, 2009 6:02 am

    Very well written

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:33 pm

      Thank you! I feel good to get good response for this really short story! 🙂

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  11. July 5, 2009 6:54 pm

    seems like I’m not the only one who’s watching ‘Charmed’ these days 😛

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:34 pm

      Hehehehehe! 😉

  12. Moorwen permalink
    July 7, 2009 5:29 am

    One and all of us own power to command anything; surely anything!
    And don’t we see a frantic, neither exaggerated by sun nor snow; Sheer passion & exploitation of hidden acumen and you can do whatever. Good writing.

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 8, 2009 5:34 pm

      That was philosophical!

  13. July 9, 2009 3:42 pm

    Nice blog you have… btw that genre is called drabble =D

    • Ayesha permalink
      July 9, 2009 5:40 pm

      Hey thanks for stopping by and welcome! 🙂

      Err… I knew the word but had slipped off my mind. Thanks for reminding it 😆

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