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Your heart

June 13, 2008

Your heart is

An ocean of joy

That absorbs every pain

And spread the light

Of life

Hope

And strength

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9 Comments leave one →
  1. June 14, 2008 4:53 am

    hmm … beautiful!

  2. shobig permalink
    June 14, 2008 7:16 am

    Nice, but…

    1) If it is poetry, there should be no …s and -s (dots and dashes, that is).

    2) Should have been spreads in the fourth verse.

  3. Ayesha permalink
    June 14, 2008 8:43 am

    Will keep that in mind, Thanks.
    Though I don’t claim to be a poet… :-S

  4. June 15, 2008 5:51 am

    Hi – Good work yaar – keep it up – you dont ned to claim to be a poet – you are already one if you have a sense of rhythm – which you already do 🙂

  5. June 15, 2008 5:54 am

    I meant you dont NEED to claim to be a poet instead of you dont ned to claim to be a poet

    It was a spelling mistake – happens to anyone if you dont re read what you wrote in a hurry before posting it.

  6. June 15, 2008 5:57 am

    We are but mere mortals
    never claiming to be superior
    than anyone else
    who inhabits the world
    that we live in

  7. Ayesha permalink
    June 15, 2008 8:57 am

    Thank you! 🙂

    Well, actually that was my clear admission that poetry have never been my forte still I try and really don’t exactly like what I come up with 😛

  8. June 16, 2008 3:08 pm

    No harm in trying out new things.

  9. Ayesha permalink
    June 16, 2008 4:35 pm

    Right Nadeen!

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