Posted by: Ayesha | November 10, 2009

Nocturnal Stillness

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The nocturnal stillness
Absorbs me
Into your memory
That is alive and inflamed
Like a burning log in the fireplace

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  1. She said:

    “The nocturnal stillness
    Absorbs me
    Into your memory
    That is alive and inflamed
    Like a burning log in the fireplace”

    He said:

    “I watched the moon
    silently making its way
    through the sleepy stars
    gracefully and softly
    fading into the yawning dawn

    I wished that you were there
    to share it with me”

    By: Asma Ahsan on November 10, 2009
    at 4:15 pm

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  2. I love your poetic inputs :)

    I knew that poem was so incomplete… but I just couldn’t fill in the gaps and voids. You did a good job!

    Thanks *thumps up* :D

    By: Ayesha on November 10, 2009
    at 4:23 pm

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    • Obviously – What poem is complete for a woman untill the guy says the right thing back to cheer her up . :P

      Men have no imagination really!

      Woman tells guy she misses him – he usually replies he will call back after the match is over on the TV! :P

      There was a song on that too – by Faakhir I think! A guy was dumped because he preferred cricket over his wife!!! LOL!!!

      Personally, if my guy answered back my romantic words with a dialogue – it would creep me out – I dont like emotional guys!

      My hubby would simply smile, say he missed me too – as in – “I missed you too” – 4 words only – and then ask me what I had made him for dinner! :P

      That is what I like in my guy – his non-filmy style. :)

      By: Asma Ahsan on November 10, 2009
      at 4:38 pm

  3. Intensity with an economy of language! A good one!

    By: Aadil on November 11, 2009
    at 5:31 am

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    • Ayesha is economical with words – :P

      By: Asma Ahsan on November 11, 2009
      at 5:52 am

  4. Well well… nice poem… and hmmm… boys always lack sentiments… infact they lack the power of expression not sentiments… :)

    By: captureuniverse on November 12, 2009
    at 8:53 am

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    • @CU .. I strongly disagree! *what made you say this?* ..

      By: Aadil on November 12, 2009
      at 10:32 am

    • O O O….now wait wait…. don’t tell me brother that now you are taking my words in other way…. :S

      I just said in general way… as Asma saying

      “Woman tells guy she misses him – he usually replies he will call back after the match is over on the TV! ”

      I was taking that line on, nothing else…otherwise I reserved my comments and as they are my OWN so I didn’t make them public… :)

      Peace and Cheers :)

      By: captureuniverse on November 12, 2009
      at 10:42 am

    • LOL – boys – please show me one guy who would give up a live cricket match to go shopping with his girl. :P

      Admit defeat!!! You boys are born cricket mad! That is why even women like me who never really understood the game learn to enjoy it – just to be able to share the wonderful shouting session with the boys when the batsman scores a sixer!!!

      T-20 went well in Dubai – I went to check out a live match here – UFF stadium hai!!!. :P

      Stadium dekh kar hi tabeeyat set ho gae thi. :P

      By: Asma Ahsan on November 14, 2009
      at 9:20 pm

    • I am also crazy about cricket… well sort of :P

      That new stadium is indeed very innovative and beautiful. The commentators kept on praising it throughout the series :)

      By: Ayesha on November 15, 2009
      at 12:21 pm

  5. Ohk sis, sorry I couldn’t get the context :)

    By: Aadil on November 12, 2009
    at 11:05 am

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    • :)
      well I am philosphical and khabti too… :D

      By: captureuniverse on November 12, 2009
      at 11:08 am

  6. Yes, I forgot the fact hence objected .. :)

    By: Aadil on November 12, 2009
    at 11:15 am

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    • Objection point is so far debatable but I think here Point should be sticked to Ayesha’s creativity…. :D

      or there could be big objection raised by Ayesha :D

      By: captureuniverse on November 13, 2009
      at 6:04 am

    • Objection overruled! :P

      Frankly, I don’t much like this poem of mine as it seems incomplete! :|

      By: Ayesha on November 14, 2009
      at 3:55 pm

    • Objection sustained…. :D

      its nice piece Ayesha but yes creator is never satisfied with his creations… :)

      By: captureuniverse on November 16, 2009
      at 4:55 am

    • Creator is never satisfied ith his creations – Agreed on that – I cant stop deleting my blogs!

      I read them later and think – WHAT RUBBISH I WRITE ALL DAY – Move to trash please.

      All creators except ALLAH – Only HE(SWT) has the strength to accept all his creations with all their flaws and drawbacks. :)

      Artists should learn some for that concept too.

      By: Asma Ahsan on November 17, 2009
      at 8:39 am

    • I’m never satisfied with my work… NEVER :?

      By: Ayesha on November 21, 2009
      at 1:30 pm


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